Substantive editing sample 71:
Checking for matches

The substantive editor addresses lack of concreteness, wordiness, and many other problems. The goal is to make the text understandable with a single reading. In the original of this sample, leading into a procedure, a typical reader will have to read the text several times before discerning its meaning.

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