Substantive editing sample 72:
Limitations with the refresh rate

The substantive editor addresses ambiguity, awkwardness, and many other problems. Sometimes a rigorous reorganization is called for. The goal is to make the text pertinent in context. The text in this sample immediately followed a complex table of monitor models, LCD settings, and CRT or TV settings.

Note: The author of this piece was not a native English speaker. He very much appreciated the heavy commentary that explained my thinking behind the many suggested revisions. The highlighted comments elucidated for him many of the subtle peculiarities of American English.

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